SET UP: Gabriel is Mykhael’s half brother. In My Killer My Love he attempted to destroy an ancient sacred area, and was defeated by Kendra and Mykhael. Turns out he was influenced by some very nasty Atrahasis. He’s been given a chance to redeem himself by working among humans until he learns humility. It might be a long, long time. This is the first draft, which is mostly dialogue
“I do not have the strength to touch you without further action, could you please fasten your garment again?”
“You’re stopping?” Her gaze drifted down his front to where he was obviously aroused. “You want me…”
“Until my manly appendage is about to explode.”
“Your what?”
“I saw the phrase in one of your books…you don’t think of it in those words? The others seemed too crude”
“It’s a penis. Or a cock. Or a Mighty Wang of Power. A love handle. Take your pick”
Mona Karel Author 
I like Clair.
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She’s neat…loyal, pragmatic, snarky. Comfortable within her skin
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Off to a good start! I love his line “Until my manly appendage is about to explode.” That really cracks me up! Looking forward to reading the full book.
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Thanks. This story has been coming in fits and starts, when the first book flowed. But I didn’t know much about writing then and wasted page after page on description that even bored me!
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I couldn’t help but chuckle when he quoted: “Until my manly appendage is about to explode.” I love snarky banter. lol
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Thanks! He’s a challenge, Mykhael could be less in tune with the modern world. I want to keep a balance of his heritage but have him more prepared to be on earth
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Titillating dialogue, Mona. Can’t wait to read what happens next.
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